This is my first draft / final rough cut of my documentary.
In class, my peers and I assessed each other's projects and gave feedback (I have made an audience feedback form for them to fill out - click here) but, we also watched each other's projects as a class and received feedback (I made notes in my notebook and have copied them up below...)
- re-shoot "research" shot - lighting too dark
- re-record narration / voice overs - make sure all the same volume / tone of voice
- change first question to "What is a 'perfect' woman?" - keep it simple
- crop a few of the vox-pop shots (crop out cabinet etc)
- interview section - interview some boys (outside shots) \
- show an alternative opinion
- mix cut away footage / archive footage of 'models' with the interview sections
- graphics (after effects) - statistics
- re-shoot myself asking the questions (alternative shots)
- change 'health consultant' to psychologist / expert
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