Editing: Updated Documentary Extract

I  have taken the suggested improvements from my audience feedback into consideration and have made multiple changes to my project. 

Here is a link to my first 'rough cut' - click here

And here is my updated version...



I have analysed some of the changes made below.

Some titles, for example when the person being interviewed comes up? Some more vox-pops and perhaps an alternative view this is a good idea, I will add titles when the person is being interviewed 

 

In my audience feedback, a member of my target audience suggested that I include some titles during the interview so that it was clearer for viewers, who was being interviewed. I decided to use a simple title since research proved to me that this is a common convention in documentaries. (http://bethmossadvancedportfolio.blogspot.co.uk/2014/11/editing.html)

I have customised the titles in Final Cut Pro X, to fit with my colour theme and also, brand identity is continued, as the white and pink titles link to the BBC Three logo.

wider variety in vox pops, maybe some adults or boys I would like to include alternative opinions but need to keep an eye on the duration/length of my project as it shouldn't exceed 5 mins 

I did not have enough time left in my project to include male opinions because it would have exceeded 5 minutes, and I thought that if I included a 'boys' opinion, then I would have had to have a larger section about male representations in the media. However, I have only made an extract, and in one my ancillary products (magazine listings review) I will mention the content of what would be in the 'rest' of the programme, as it would be about 45 minutes long.

However, I have included an 'alternative' opinion, where she disagrees with the media presentations and says that models are 'too skinny' and that most images are photoshopped. I also mention in the beginning 'narrative' section that during the programme "I'll explore the art of photoshop" which suggests that in the rest of the documentary, the amount of media that is photoshopped / fake would be further explored.